Peer Review!!

I was really impressed with Kiana’s annotations. Her first paragraph was always outstanding. She provides good information on why her sources are credible like how they have an abstract and are affiliated with a university. However, she needs to add a thesis in to each of her sources. For her second paragraph, I feel like she did a good job getting the general information about the source, but I think she needs to add a couple more sentences on explaining the study. In addition, she needs to add quotes. Lastly, her third paragraph needs to be worked on for the first source she did. Her second source correctly got into conversation with the first source; however, for the first source, she was to generalize in her comparison. In terms of Takaia, she has found a great source for her paper, but unfortunately it wasn’t an academic source. However, since I did not have time to look at her second source, I will break down what I think she needs to look at. For the citation, she needs to indent the second line. In the second paragraph, she needs to describe what the article is about instead of comparing it to other sourced. And lastly the third paragraph needs to be more on comparing sources instead of explaining different vloggers. I am excited to see her paper and I am sad that I didn’t get to see the second source. It was interesting to see how different these two annotations were from mine. I found myself wondering if maybe I explained my studies too much and if I should reduce the amount I submit. I really hope to read these wonderful writers final products.